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Some people think that students should play more team sports, such as football and volleyball, rather than individuals sports, such as running and swimming. Do you agree?

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In recent years, people are playing different kinds of
sports
 because they are becoming an integral part of life.
While
 some folks think that children ought to start to play professional
sports
 like football and volleyball compared to running and swimming. In my opinion, I disagree that students should not concentrate
to
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entry level
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sports
. One of the primary
reason
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 why students ought to concentrate on running
sports
 is that it maintains someone's physical fitness.
In other words
, if students run every
day
half
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 an hour, they became fit
from
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physically.
Furthermore
, running is one of the important factors to
be consider
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 in professional
sports
.
For example
, if
sports
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a sports
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 person needs to enter in
football
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a football
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team
, they should pass some running criteria.
Moreover
,
if
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any
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football players
also
 run every
day
 to improve their fitness. Another point to consider
that
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 children should
also
 swim every
day
 to become strong.
In other words
, if children swim every
day
half
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 an hour, they became fit
from
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their arm
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arm
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.
Furthermore
, swimming is one of the important factors to
be consider
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 in professional
sports
.
For example
, if
sports
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a sports
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 person needs to enter in
volleyball
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the volleyball
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team
, they should pass some swimming criteria.
Moreover
,
if
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any volleyball players
also
 swim every
day
 to improve their fitness. In conclusion, nowadays, people's trend towards
sports
 are increasing.
Although
 some
team
sports
 should make someone's
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 high and it is great
games
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game
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 for understanding each other, going into
the
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team
sports
 everyone
need
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 to pass
individuals
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individual
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sports
 games. I think
,
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individual’s
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individual
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sports
 are really important for
sports
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a sports
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 person to become a career in professional
sports
.
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