Some people think that students should play more team sports, such as football and volleyball, rather than individuals sports, such as running and swimming. Do you agree?
In recent years, people are playing different kinds of
sports
because they are becoming an integral part of life. While
some folks think that children ought to start to play professional sports
like football and volleyball compared to running and swimming. In my opinion, I disagree that students should not concentrate to
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on
entry level
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entry-level
sports
.
One of the primary reason
why students ought to concentrate on running Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
sports
is that it maintains someone's physical fitness. In other words
, if students run every day
half
an hour, they became fit Change preposition
for half
from
physically. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, running is one of the important factors to be consider
in professional Change the verb form
be considered
sports
. For example
, if sports
person needs to enter in Correct article usage
a sports
football
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a football
the football
team
, they should pass some running criteria. Moreover
, if
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apply
any
football players Correct quantifier usage
apply
also
run every day
to improve their fitness.
Another point to consider that
children should Add a missing verb
is that
also
swim every day
to become strong. In other words
, if children swim every day
half
an hour, they became fit Change preposition
for half
from
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to
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their arm
arm
. Fix the agreement mistake
arms
Furthermore
, swimming is one of the important factors to be consider
in professional Change the verb form
be considered
sports
. For example
, if sports
person needs to enter in Correct article usage
a sports
volleyball
Add an article
the volleyball
team
, they should pass some swimming criteria. Moreover
, if
any volleyball players Correct word choice
apply
also
swim every day
to improve their fitness.
In conclusion, nowadays, people's trend towards sports
are increasing. Although
some team
sports
should make someone's positions
high and it is great Fix the agreement mistake
position
games
for understanding each other, going into Fix the agreement mistake
game
the
Correct article usage
apply
team
sports
everyone need
to pass Change the verb form
needs
individuals
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individual
sports
games. I think,
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apply
individual’s
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individual
sports
are really important for sports
person to become a career in professional Correct article usage
a sports
sports
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