The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The scheme below represents information on the creation of
sugar
from
sugar
cane. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it could be seen that manufacturing involves seven stages. Production starts from
sugar
canes
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cane
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to the final product.
Also
,
this
process is manmade and requires professional skills and using various types of machinery
To begin
with, the growth of
sugar
canes
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takes from year to year and a half.
Then
, employees or special vehicles (
for instance
tractors) harvest these
canes
.
Next,
sugar
canes
get into a particular machine which crushes them.
As a result
, they turn into the juice. Later, it goes into a limestone filter and
purified
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.
Further
,
this
purified juice is heated up in a special bowl which is called an evaporator and turns into syrup. The next stage
,
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is a centrifuge. In
this
stage
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sugar
crystals are separated from syrup.
Lastly
, these crystals get into the big can where they are drying and cooling
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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