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Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay their own tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #cost #education #students #tuition #fees
Nowadays, every
student
want
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wants
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 to pursue
a
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apply
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higher
study
 for
a
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apply
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better
oppurtunities
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opportunities
of
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in
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 life.
Although
, their still many
of
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apply
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students who need the
government
 to cover
a
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the
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cost
for
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of
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 major
education
 needed like in middle school and high school. I totally agree regarding
sutudent
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student
students
have
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having
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 to pay
themselves
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apply
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a tuition fees
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a tuition fee
tuition fees
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on
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for
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 higher
education
 and I will elaborate on my point of view below.
To begin
 with, if the
government
 have to pay tuition fees
of
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for
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 higher
education
 for every
student
this
 will
putting
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put
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 too much
reponsibilities
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responsibilities
 on the
government
.
For a
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 reason is that the
government
 have a limited
budget
 to spend on every part of
country
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the country
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 so if the
government
 have to
tak
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take
this
 responsibility, it will cut off
alot
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a lot
 of chance for
other part
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another part
other parts
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 of
country
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the country
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 that
also
 need a
budget
 to spend on it.
For instance
,
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 who need to
study
a
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apply
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higher
education
 need to have
thier
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their
 own
budget
 because it
not
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is not
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 a basic need
education
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for education
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 already.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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 only have to cover a basic needed
education
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that is
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is
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apply
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enough. In
term
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terms
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 of the
government
have
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having
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 a job to cover all basic
need
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needs
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education
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of education
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 for every
student
 in a
country
 in order to make a
country
 move forward but not a higher
education
 need for every
student
.
For example
, various of students have their
disired
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desired
desire
 to
study
a
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an
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 upper
education
 to make themselves better on
carrer
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career
 or
workiong
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working
walking
 path.
However
, the most
importantly
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important
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 is that
their
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there
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 still
a
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milons
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millions
million
 of
student
 in a
country
 that need a fundamental
education
 or a core basic
education
 that
every one
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everyone
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 should have a chance to
study
 it and the
gornment
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government
 need to cover
for
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apply
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the
cost
that
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apply
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first before giving a
cost
 to students who need to
study
a
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apply
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higher
education
. In conclusion, everyone who is a
student
have
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has
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 a purpose to
study
a
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for a
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greater
education
on
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in
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 their life but it
also
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is also
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 not a job or
responsibilty
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responsibility
 for the
gorvernment
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government
 to cover that
cost
 because
in
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apply
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a
country
 still have various part to spend a
budget
 on. So
that
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apply
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I have to
agreee
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agree
 with the statement and
i
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I
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 already told
my
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you
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 all of the reasons above.
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