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Instructions Read the question below and write an essay dealing with Advantages and Disadvantages.
You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task.
Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan.
Only then attempt to write this essay. Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company.
And give your own opinion.

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Undoubtedly, meals, especially a good
breakfast
 plays an important role in our life.
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 a project about food, I
have
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found the table on what teenagers usually eat for
breakfast
 and collected some data. In
this
project
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 I am going to outline several key features of the results of the poll.
According to
 the data, the most popular kind of food teenagers enjoy eating in the morning is sandwiches, 43% of the respondents have chosen them.
On the contrary
, the least popular food is yoghurt, not more than a fifth of teenagers eat it.(5%) It is worth mentioning that
a
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fruit is three times more than yoghurt. It seems that adolescents chose an apple or pear more often than
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a diary
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diary
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dairy
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 product.
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The problem
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 that
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 with having
breakfast
 is that a majority of people do not have it at all because it can take a lot of time. Obviously, it is not a healthy habit. A great solution
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this
 problem is to create
list
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a list
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with
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 simple recipes for
breakfast
. In conclusion, I would like to emphasize that having
breakfast
 is
the
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 important part of the day. Having
this
 meal gives people all the energy they need for their plans.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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