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Shopping is become younger generation hobby.whay are the reason, should encourage them to purse this as a hobby

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The evolution of shopping enables
people
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 to purchase everything easily, which encourages more and more
people
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 to shop, especially the youth. Nowadays, teenagers buy things online as a hobby. In
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 circumstance will be explained in the following paragraphs before my conclusion is reached. First of all, the reason, why young turn shopping into a hobby, is convenience. the advancement of technology and logistic allow individuals to
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 clothes, food, toys, supplements, and many more at their home through online shopping apps, and to obtain parcels in front of their home through modern logistic including Grab, Food panda, EMS, and other companies within a day without going to shopping malls like in the past.
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 easy procedures,
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 increasingly shop and became addicted to them.
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, the Covid - 19 has enforced
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 to stay at home, so shopping is one of the few happiness that they can pursue.
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, they need to
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 everything online in
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 to rule and regulate to prevent contagious diseases.
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,
people
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 learn how to
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 products online
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 and get used to it naturally.
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, before the pandemic, many individuals had never shopped online via Shopee, Lazada, and others, but nowadays, it is considered a new normal for regular activities for everyone. In conclusion, convenience and the pandemic are attributed young generation's dramatic increase in shopping, which became their addictive activity during leisure time.
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, in my opinion, they should purchase things in suitable amounts
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 they will be broken.
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