The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
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The bar graph compares the
rate
of
employment
in 6 different countries between
male
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and
female
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females
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for the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, the
employment
rate
was higher than
females
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in all the countries in 1995,
whereas
in 2005, the
employment
percentage varied
according to
the country. There was a significant increase in
the
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employment
conditions in 2005 compared to 1995. Both the
employment
rates
of
women
and
men
increased in all the countries. The
men
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employment
rates
in Switzerland and Iceland were over 65% in 1995
while
there were only 55%
employment
rates
for
men
in the UK. In 1995, New Zealand and the USA had approximately 60% of male
employment
rates
rate
.
On the contrary
, the
women
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employment
percentage in 1995 was lower in Australia and New Zealand. The
employment
rate
was at its peak for
women
in Switzerland. In 2005, the
employment
rate
rose for both
women
and
men
. The highest
employment
rate
for
women
was in Switzerland
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68% and the lowest was I. Australia for 38%. Though the percentage was higher likened to 1995,
men
were still leading the
employment
sectors.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, employment, rates, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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