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The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
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The bar graph compares the
rate
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 of
employment
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 in 6 different countries between
male
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 and
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females
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 for the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, the
employment
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rate
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 was higher than
females
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 in all the countries in 1995,
whereas
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 in 2005, the
employment
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 percentage varied
according to
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 the country. There was a significant increase in
the
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employment
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 conditions in 2005 compared to 1995. Both the
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rates
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 increased in all the countries. The
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men
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employment
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rates
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 in Switzerland and Iceland were over 65% in 1995
while
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 there were only 55%
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rates
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 for
men
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 in the UK. In 1995, New Zealand and the USA had approximately 60% of male
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rates
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rate
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.
On the contrary
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, the
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women
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employment
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 percentage in 1995 was lower in Australia and New Zealand. The
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rate
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 was at its peak for
women
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 in Switzerland. In 2005, the
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rate
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 rose for both
women
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 and
men
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. The highest
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rate
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 for
women
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 was in Switzerland
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 68% and the lowest was I. Australia for 38%. Though the percentage was higher likened to 1995,
men
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 were still leading the
employment
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 sectors.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, employment, rates, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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