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Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There might be contentious debates regarding the issue of whether it is necessary for the
government
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 to invest in
education
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 for young
people
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 than
adult
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the adult
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 population who cannot read and write or not. I strongly believe that it is more essential to spend the budget
in
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 the
education
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 for
younger
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the younger
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generation
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 than that for the older
generation
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 assume that it is significant for the
government
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 to spend more money on
education
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 for
adult
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the adult
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 population who cannot read and write. First of all,
people
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 who cannot read and write are not able to get jobs, so it is too difficult for them to make a living. It could lead to conflict between the younger
generation
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 and the older
generation
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.
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, the
government
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 have a responsibility to provide basic
education
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 to all citizens. If the
government
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 spend
budget
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the budget
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 on the
education
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 of adult, it could exert a considerable positive influence on them, and it allows them to improve their quality of
live
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. As far as the other opinion is concerned, some
people
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 believe that it is more
worth
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for
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it for
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 the
government
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 budget to invest in the
education
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 of young
people
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.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education
  • young people
  • government
  • money
  • adult population
  • read
  • write
  • development
  • nation
  • improve
  • quality of life
  • investing
  • reduced
  • poverty
  • income inequality
  • funds
  • balancing
  • budget allocation
  • crucial
  • equal access
  • opportunities
  • promoting
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • positive effects
  • society
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