Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There might be contentious debates regarding the issue of whether it is necessary for the
government
to invest in
education
for young
people
than
adult
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population who cannot read and write or not. I strongly believe that it is more essential to spend the budget
in
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the
education
for
younger
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the younger
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generation
than that for the older
generation
. On the one hand, some
people
assume that it is significant for the
government
to spend more money on
education
for
adult
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the adult
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population who cannot read and write. First of all,
people
who cannot read and write are not able to get jobs, so it is too difficult for them to make a living. It could lead to conflict between the younger
generation
and the older
generation
.
Moreover
, the
government
have a responsibility to provide basic
education
to all citizens. If the
government
spend
budget
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on the
education
of adult, it could exert a considerable positive influence on them, and it allows them to improve their quality of
live
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. As far as the other opinion is concerned, some
people
believe that it is more
worth
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for
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the
government
budget to invest in the
education
of young
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education
  • young people
  • government
  • money
  • adult population
  • read
  • write
  • development
  • nation
  • improve
  • quality of life
  • investing
  • reduced
  • poverty
  • income inequality
  • funds
  • balancing
  • budget allocation
  • crucial
  • equal access
  • opportunities
  • promoting
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • positive effects
  • society
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