Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There might be contentious debates regarding the issue of whether it is necessary for the
government
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to invest in
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for young
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than
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population who cannot read and write or not. I strongly believe that it is more essential to spend the budget
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the
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for
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the younger
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generation
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than that for the older
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. On the one hand, some
people
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assume that it is significant for the
government
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to spend more money on
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for
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the adult
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population who cannot read and write. First of all,
people
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who cannot read and write are not able to get jobs, so it is too difficult for them to make a living. It could lead to conflict between the younger
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and the older
generation
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.
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, the
government
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have a responsibility to provide basic
education
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to all citizens. If the
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spend
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the budget
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on the
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of adult, it could exert a considerable positive influence on them, and it allows them to improve their quality of
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. As far as the other opinion is concerned, some
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believe that it is more
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for
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the
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budget to invest in the
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of young
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education
  • young people
  • government
  • money
  • adult population
  • read
  • write
  • development
  • nation
  • improve
  • quality of life
  • investing
  • reduced
  • poverty
  • income inequality
  • funds
  • balancing
  • budget allocation
  • crucial
  • equal access
  • opportunities
  • promoting
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • positive effects
  • society
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