Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone's life. Some people say that advertising is a postive part of lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

One of the social concerns today relates to advertising.
While
it is widely believed that advertising
have
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many benefits to human life, others believe
people
will have
negative
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effect
due to
advertising. In my opinion,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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can face a
lots
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difficulties
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when using advertising. On the one hand, it is argued
by
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some
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that
people
can know about new
product
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products
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released. The main reason is that advertising is a method that
bring
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the image of items to many
people
. It is
also
possible to say that newly launched products will be able to reach many
people
through various types of advertising
such
as on TV,
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internet. One good illustration of
this
is Oppo has just launched a new folding phone line on March 28, 2023. Before officially launching that phone, Oppo has done many advertising campaigns about
this
phone on many different platforms. Another reason is advertising help
people
make a clear comparison between two products.
For example
, individuals can compare the two features of Oppo and Samsung folding phones through the advertisements of these brands.
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed by others that information on
the
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advertising
sometime
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is wrong.
People
often have
this
opinion because
advertiser
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advertisers
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always
exaggerate
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information to attract
ads
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ad
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viewers. A second point is that
people
will pay more to buy a product
due to
the
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advertising. A particularly good example here is Apple users had to spend twice as much to buy
iphone
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iPhone
X because the advertising money
this
company spent was too big in 2019. In conclusion, advertising not only bring many positive effect but
also
negative aspects. Personally, I tend to believe that advertisers should reduce the cost of advertising and
censorship
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the information on the
advertisments
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advertisements
for
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to
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attract
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more and more
product’s
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product
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users.
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