It is often said that the government spend too much money on the projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problem that are more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Many
people
from all over the world are protesting that the state is spending big money on the protection of wild
animals
. But there are other problems that the governments should spend
on
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this
. In
this
case on the one
hand
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I agree but on the other no. And I would like to write in his essay. I would like to start by saying
that
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why I agree.I will start with the fact that in many states there are wild
animals
that are dying out and the state spends money so that they leave behind descendants.
For example
, there are very few pandas left in the world. There are 1,300 kills per year mostly hunting to decorate their homes. The panda is a symbol of the
world wide
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fund for nature protection. Another reason why it is necessary to protect
animals
.
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At
this
time
people
cut down trees in the forests where wild
animals
live because there are few wild
animals
left to build a
megapole
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megapolis
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there and the state must protect them. The decision to build parks for these
animals
and leave them under supervision.I would like to tell the negative side of why it is not necessary to protect wild
animals
. one of the main reasons is
because
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wild
animals
eat a lot of useful plants that
people
need in the medical field. In conclusion and in the
end
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I would like to tell
people
the protection of wild
animals
is not necessary I think that on the one
hand
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it is good and
on the other
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it is bad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem
  • Human welfare
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable development
  • Preservation
  • Endangered species
  • Habitat destruction
  • Climate change
  • Environmental stewardship
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