The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line graph illustrates how many tourists made
inquiries
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in the Tourist Information Office in a specific city from January to June 2011.
Overall
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, there are three methods visitors can use to make queries, either in person, by letter/ email, or by telephone.
However
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, these channels are uncommon in the first month, showing fewer figures. Albeit, there is a dramatic change in the pattern as the in-person and by telephone grow significantly throughout the month,
while
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by letter/email shows the opposite. In January, more than 800 people made their
inquiries
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by telephone which is the highest in that month and fluctuated for several months until April.
Then
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, it slowly went upwards, ending with 1600
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. Followed closely by writing a letter or thru email at under 800. The figure remained for the next two months,
then
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dropped to the lowest point in May and June at under 400
inquiries
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.
On the other hand
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, the personal approach at the beginning was the lowest number at above 400
inquiries
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. But the number of tourist queries increased fifth folds, reaching the peak in June, and ended with less than 2000
inquiries
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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