The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram provided illustrates the transformation of how
sugar
is manufactured from Use synonyms
sugar
cane. Use synonyms
Overall
, the procedure consists of seven stages which can be separated into four main steps: farming, crushing, separating and drying.
It begins with growing Linking Words
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cans for about 12 to 18 months until the cans were ripe enough to harvest. There are two ways to harvest the canes, one is mechanically and the other one is Use synonyms
manually
Replace the adverb
manual
which
the people have to remove the leaves by hand and chop the cans off.
After that, the Correct word choice
and
sugar
cane is crushed by the machine and extract the juice of them which is purified by a limestone filter. Use synonyms
Subsequently
, the pure juice is boiled by an evaporator to remove the extra water from it and becomes syrup. In the following stage, as the syrup is put in a centrifuge, it separates Linking Words
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crystals from it. Use synonyms
Finally
, the crystals are dried out and cooled down and the process is completed.Linking Words
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