The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The line charts provide information about how the change in electrical devices in entrepreneurship and how much time people tidy their areas in a particular country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the proportion of households with electronic devices had significant upward trends,
while
the amount of time doing housework per household experienced a downward trend. In terms of using electrical devices, In 1920, washing machines had the highest
rate
at 40 %, followed by refrigerators and vacuum cleaners which were 30% and around 0.2%. Meanwhile, from 1940 to 2019, the number of washing machines gradually fluctuated, it was at around 75% and had
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smallest
rate
in 2019,
while
the
rate
of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners were
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increase, they had the same
rate
at about 100 % by the end of the period. Turning to the number of
houseworks
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housework
, in 1920, stood at around 50%. There had a substantial decline until the year 1960 which is around 20 %. After that, it
decrease
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marginally until 2019. In comparison,
although
the number of electrical appliances was
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, it had a
decrease
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trend in the
amount
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of hours of housework per week and per person.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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