Some people think that countryside life is healthier while others believe that city is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. Discuss both views with your own perception.

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it is widely believed that
countryside
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life
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is healthier, others believe that the
city
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is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. In my opinion, we must
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to know
protect our bodies. On the one hand, it is argued by some that
countryside
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life
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is healthier than the
city
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.
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countryside
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life
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is quiet not noisy and chaotic because when
people
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livein
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live in
a place quietly, they feel the
body
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is relaxed,
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doesn’t think much.
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, my mother likes to live in the
countryside
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because in the
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she thinks about work very much.
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, the
air
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is good and little smoke from vehicle help
people
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have
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strong health.
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example
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, the
air
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city
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is very polluted if
people
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inhale, their
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body
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bodies
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will have very sick. The
air
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countryside
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isn’t more polluted than the
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city
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so
people
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will have little sick.
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, it is strongly believed by others that facility is modern, very place entertainment, hospital, gym,… so
countryside
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life
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isn’t healthier than in the
city
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.
People
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often have
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opinion because
people
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who have strong health
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must have the full facilities from medical to service.
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, when
people
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have sick
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they will bring to a hospital near fastly. A second point is that
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has very healthy food and drink for the
body
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of
people
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.
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, food and drink have nutrients that will help the
body
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of
people
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to be very strong, and limit very sick. In conclusion,
countryside
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life
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is healthier
while
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others
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in others
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, the
city
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is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. Personally, I tend to believe that which
also
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very good
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and important
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must
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to know
protect our bodies.
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