Some people think that countryside life is healthier while others believe that city is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. Discuss both views with your own perception.

While
it is widely believed that
countryside
life
is healthier, others believe that the
city
is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. In my opinion, we must
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to know
protect our bodies. On the one hand, it is argued by some that
countryside
life
is healthier than the
city
.
Firstly
countryside
life
is quiet not noisy and chaotic because when
people
livein
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live in
a place quietly, they feel the
body
is relaxed,
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doesn’t think much.
For
example
, my mother likes to live in the
countryside
because in the
city
she thinks about work very much.
Secondly
, the
air
is good and little smoke from vehicle help
people
have
a
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strong health.
For
example
, the
air
city
is very polluted if
people
inhale, their
body
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will have very sick. The
air
countryside
isn’t more polluted than the
air
city
so
people
will have little sick.
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed by others that facility is modern, very place entertainment, hospital, gym,… so
countryside
life
isn’t healthier than in the
city
.
People
often have
this
opinion because
people
who have strong health
then
must have the full facilities from medical to service.
For
example
, when
people
have sick
then
they will bring to a hospital near fastly. A second point is that
this
has very healthy food and drink for the
body
of
people
.
For
example
, food and drink have nutrients that will help the
body
of
people
to be very strong, and limit very sick. In conclusion,
countryside
life
is healthier
while
others
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, the
city
is better in order to have a healthy lifestyle. Personally, I tend to believe that which
also
very good
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must
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protect our bodies.
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