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Some children nowadays take sports seriously while others play sport in their free time. Is this a positive or negative development?

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These days,
sports
 are taken seriously by some
children
 whereby others play these activities in their leisure time. I believe
this
case
 is
negative
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a negative
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 development because
children
 who locate
sports
 to
significant
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point
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 in their lives usually experience frustration and they do not
their
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 studies well. The first disadvantage of
this
case
 is
high
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 likelihood of
children
’s devastation in the end. Most of them devote their time to
be
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being
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 an athlete in the future.
However
, statistics show that only three per cent can realize their goals
due to
 some causes. To illustrate that, a significant portion of
children
 are not selected
to
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 professional teams because of their inadequate skills and despite their talents, some of them suffer from injuries
in
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their
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 young age.
Although
 their journey was bright in their childhood,
as a result
, they may become frustrated.
Thus
,
this
 situation is often harmful
for
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children
. The second detrimental aspect of
this
case
 is presumable
education
 issues.
Children
 who take
sports
 seriously often do not pay attention to their studies sufficiently.
Instead
 of attending
education
 activities, they opt to spend their time on
sports
 and
this
 situation leads to
fail
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failure
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 in their exams. Most sportsmen’s low grades and
education
 skills can be counted as an example to explain
this
case
.
In addition
, unfortunately, some
children
 may show aggressive behaviour
due to
 their competing addiction and
this
case
 may cause
experiencing
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experience
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 discrimination among others. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied in
this
 situation.
Although
this
case
 is beneficial for
children
’s physical development and discharging their energies, for me, its negative impacts overweigh
positive
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 ones
due to
 their probable depressive health and
education
 drawbacks. 46 dk.
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