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Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #university #study #lack #workers #electricians #plumbers
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It is true that some people think a student should study in a
university
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 program but others think they should do vocational education
such
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 as electricians and plumbers. I disagree with
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 opinion. On the one hand, learning at
university
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 has many job opportunities for
students
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. In fact, a
university
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 degree has a huge value which proves their effort over 4 to 5 years. If you graduate with a
university
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 degree, you will have a chance double higher. Because your degree will be an evaluation of your attitude, efforts, and ability. In
university
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 has many activities for
students
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 to take part in. these activities help them with physical enhancement. Sometimes, it organizes some competitions for learners to gain more experience in their field or industry. After learning tertiary education, the first salary they have are more than apprentices. On the others hand, the most important thing for
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 studying. First and foremost, learning helps
students
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 gain more understanding and
knowledge
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. They can apply
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knowledge
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 to life and work. For
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instant, Vietnam has many competitions for
students
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 in high schools and universities. The science and technology competition is one of the most famous competitions in my country. When
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 participate in
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 competition, they must use their understanding to make a production about science and technology
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 as robots, physical energy products or chemistry.
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, they can exchange
knowledge
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 with many other contestants.
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, improving your
knowledge
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 is much more important than having to choose low-degree jobs. And having many better options than having to apprentice.
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,
students
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 should put learning tasks first.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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