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Healthcare should be provided for free regardless of someone’s income. Do you agree?

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Healthcare
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 is free in many developed countries.
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, in some nations,
such
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 as the United States, medical care is not free and patients must pay for it. In
this
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 essay, I would like to share my opinion about the debate between private and public
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. The main problem with paying for hospital treatments is that they could result in not
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 affordable for some human beings.
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, poor citizens would be more likely to die because of a lack of medication
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 richer people would get the best doctors available. Public
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 is the biggest achievement of democracy and the Welfare State. In my opinion, everyone should be provided with
healthcare
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 regardless of their economic wellness. Despite my position in the debate, I want to highlight some advantages that could come with private hospitals. The principal issue with our system is that everything
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 public is corrupted.
This
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 statement is particularly true for a country like Italy where Mafia is controlling every institution.
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, a private
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 system could improve the level of the service funding the renewal of the infostructures and, at the same time, it could rise the wage for doctors.
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 trend could be an incentive for students to start a career in that sector. In conclusion, even if private care may present some pros they don't outweigh the downsides , so, it is better to keep public
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