The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The chart illustrates the money spent on consumer goods in
France
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and the
UK
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in the year 2010, consumer goods named cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras. As transparent from the statistics, cars were the item of all others where the highest amount of money had been spent.
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noteworthy is that the British spent the most wealth on consumer goods than
France
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in the period given. In terms of cars, the
UK
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spent more expenditure on
this
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category, about $450,000, on
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as opposed to the French at merely $400,000.
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, British expenditure was higher on books than the French (roughly $400,000 and exactly $300,000 correspondingly). In the
UK
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, the camera buyers shot a peak at approximately $350,000 and were [over half of = over double that of] the French ($150,000).
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, the remaining part of the money was spent on
France
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. Above $380,000 was spent by the French on computers, whilst spending on
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category by the British ranked in descending order, approximately $350,000. Expenditure on perfumes in
France
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was marginally higher = witnessed a marginal rise than that of the
UK
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, around $200,000 and $150,000 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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