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In this era of globalization, some people think that studying abroad is the best way to attain a well-paid job while others believe other options are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 globalized world, certain
people
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 believe that studying abroad is the best way to grab a well-paid job.
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, other
people
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 think that other options are good. My opinion
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 essay is that studying abroad is better when compared to the other options.
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, studying in
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reputed Universities in developed
countries
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 like the United States, UK and Canada provides us with the opportunity to improve our educational knowledge and
skills
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 compared with developing
countries
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.
Students
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 are studying under experienced international faculties abroad and learning new
skills
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 from their professors.
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, the advanced technology in the educational system induces
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students
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 to grasp innovative ideas and
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 for their
career
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.
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, many
companies
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 abroad prefer young foreign professionals as well.
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,
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 of moving to international
countries
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, build your knowledge and
skills
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 in your home country.
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 of
companies
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 preferred skilled and experienced candidates.
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, if you are a Statistics graduate with SPSS or R or Python software
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, the company might have high
chances
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 of recruiting you and
provide
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promotion
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a promotion
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 if you perform well. In conclusion, studying abroad is the best way to attain a
well paid
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well-paid
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 job. But, other
People
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 believe that other options are good.
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 me,
students
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 from developing
countries
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 get a high standard of education when compared to developed
countries
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.
Students
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 meet experts and learn new
skills
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 from them.
Companies
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 prefer talented young international
people
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 to work for their
companies
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, even in civil service foreign graduates are preferred.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Exposure
  • Educational systems
  • Career opportunities
  • Cutting-edge technology
  • Soft skills
  • Adaptability
  • Communication
  • Cultural understanding
  • Multinational companies
  • Networking opportunities
  • International internships
  • Global work readiness
  • Cost-prohibitive
  • Local university programs
  • Practical work experience
  • Vocational training
  • Specialized certification programs
  • High-demand industries
  • Qualifications
  • Job markets
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