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All parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others having a range of subjects is better for a children's future

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Many
parents
 want the best chances for their
children
. There are some people who think that should be taught schools
children
 capabilities,
however
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 I think having ology is bright for a
children
's future. To commence with, several
parents
 want the best chances for their
children
. There are
an amount
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 of advantages of should be taught schools
children
 subjects. Because many
children
 learn a lot of information in schools. They
also
 learn
wordly
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worldly
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
Firstly
this
improve
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improves
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broaden
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and broaden
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 their horizons. They
looks
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look
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 at life
with
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from
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different
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 perspective.
This
 is because it is the best way to study. So most
parents
 provide
children
 with money for study. Whenever you get a place at university, meanwhile they
financial
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 support you. Their
parents
 have given us everything. When we achieve to goals, they can be proud of us and can be blissfully happy.
Thus
, to focus on the
overall
 development of a child they should be introduced to many kinds of subjects. Most
children
 are not fully aware of
the
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their
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 choices .
On the other
hand
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 learning
skills
 are beneficial for the
overall
 development of a kid. Learning computers or training for leadership activities creates a background to have
hands -on
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hands-on
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- experience for the future.
Although
 it is important to get a degree and take different courses to secure a job, interpersonal
skills
 are
also
 assessed in the interviews. It depends on what kind of
skills
 they are interested in.
Additionally
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 it will improve their decision ability. In conclusion, a range of
skills
 and varieties of subjects is crucial for a
children
's better tomorrow.
Therefore
 it is important to understand and choose both these aspects for
children
.
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