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Some cities create extra housing by building tall buildings other cities do this by building on wide areas of land. Which do you think the best solution to the problem of housing.

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 plenty number of extra residents in urban cities by constructing tall buildings,
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some do
this
 by building on a large land area. In my opinion, there are two obvious solutions to tackle these problems
such
 as strong regulations from
government
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the government
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 and family should
encourage
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 their members to stay together in
a
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one house.
Firstly
, the main issue why
people
 want to construct
vast
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 number of houses in town is
due to
no
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 strict rules from the authorities that they ought to follow in
term
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 of building
the
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houses. In the meantime, if the governments give
appropriate
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list
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 of rules for them, they will grasp quickly what they should do.
For instance
,
people
 are not allowed to build
tall
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building
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buildings
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 as it neglects the meaning of
coconut
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tree
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trees
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 as our tree of life.
Moreover
, it reflects
to
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our own
custom
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customs
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 and tradition.
As a result
,
citizen
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citizens
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 are delighted to apply it and
the
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equality
of
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housing
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the housing
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 system can be obtained.
Secondly
,
role
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 of
family
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the family
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 plays the most essential part in mitigating extra housing in urban areas.
Instead
 of staying individually in an apartment,
member
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members
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 of
family
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the family
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 should encourage others to live together. Not only it helps save
people
' earn, but
also
help
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 governments to overcome
this
 massive case of extra housing. If
this
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being
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done correctly, there will be no longer extra housing issues in big cities.
For example
, in
Bali
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people
 mostly stay
together with
 a big family in
house
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a house
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 compound until
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the daughther
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daughther
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daughter
 or son gets married.
Consequently
, the problems
either
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of either
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 constructing tall buildings or wide buildings are rarely seen.
To conclude
, construction issues in urban areas whether it is for building tall houses or wide one can be controlled by special measures. If the government and societies work together, it will lead to better
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 in towns.
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