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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Online
communication
 has become more popular than face-to-face meetings these days.
While
 there are drawbacks to virtual
communication
, I consider
this
 change outweighs these downsides in terms of expanding networks and flexible appointments. It is true that the shift of
communication
 measures from real-world experience to virtual one causes negative impacts on human relationships. A case in point is a weaker connection between
people
. Since sharing atmosphere or precise facial expressions in virtual space is challenging, users obtain less information about others and have difficulty understanding personalities. Fewer opportunities to share first-hand experiences
also
 weaken the relationship
due to
 the poor memories they can create on the internet.
Hence
, there is a risk of a deteriorating sense of connectivity that supports maintaining their mental health.
On the other hand
, there are many benefits users can enjoy from online
communication
.
Firstly
,
people
 can broaden their networks to a degree which is impossible through real-world
communication
.
For example
,
people
 can connect with someone who lives in a foreign country because online platforms can connect
people
 regardless of location, which expands their perspectives of culture.
Secondly
, virtual appointments enable individuals to make schedules more flexible than face-to-face meetings. Sometimes workers face the problems of arranging a meeting
due to
 the few available times participants, which slows down the proceeding of tasks.
To sum up
,
although
 there are possible risks of weak relationships between
people
, more advantages,
such
 as expanded networks and flexible schedules, are expected to improve our lives.
Therefore
, I conclude that
this
 change brings more positive effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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