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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

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Many
people
 choose to take a
gap
year
 after finishing high school to refresh their minds and understand which university
study
 they want to apply to. In
this
gap
, they can travel,
study
, or do whatever they want. On the one hand, the advantages are that
people
 can use
this
time
 for whatever they want.
Firstly
, during
this
time
, some
people
 can learn new skills,
while
 others can travel or use
this
time
 in the right way. It can be a really useful
time
 for them to explore something new or just be sure about which
study
 plan they want to choose for studying in future.
Secondly
 and
finally
, taking a
gap
year
 can make
people
 make a lot of decisions about do they need to go to university because someone can learn and develop their skills at home and start doing something on their own.
On the other hand
, talking about disadvantages,
people
 can waste that
time
 doing absolutely nothing.
Firstly
, guys who have a party lifestyle can waste their
time
 partying or simply hanging out with friends. there are plenty of examples of these situations and
at the end
 of
this
year
,
people
 don't know what to do in their lives.
Secondly
 and
finally
, for some
people
, taking a
gap
year
, means that they are not studying at all for a whole
year
. If in the middle of the
year
, they are sure what they want to
study
, they don't have an exact
study
 schedule or subjects that they could have at the university. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons of taking a
gap
year
 and it always depends on a person's wants.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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