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Al parents want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but other think having a range of subject is better for a children's future. Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.

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In recent times, it is becoming increasingly common for
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 have to teach
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skills
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, parents think that learning a number of
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 will have a good impact on the future of young
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. I strongly believe that
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 trend can have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure. There are various reasons why
people
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 believe that
schools
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 should teach
children
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skills
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. First of all, learning a range of
skills
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 helps to build self-awareness in the young generation.
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children
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 who learn important social and emotional
skills
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 can better understand and express their own emotions, which in turn helps them to develop healthy communication and relationships with others. Another glaring cause of teaching
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skills
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 is improved life
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 as cooking, budgeting, and household maintenance can help
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 succeed in all aspects of their lives.
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, there are several reasons why parents argue that
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 have to only offer
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 that will be useful in the future. First and foremost, learning a number of
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 at school helps to develop foundational knowledge.
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, teaching
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 like language mathematics, science, and social studies at an early age helps
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 develop a strong foundation of knowledge.
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,
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 will build upon it as they grow and advance to learning more complex topics later in life. In my opinion, society will benefit more if students are passionate about what they are learning.
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, nobody can really predict which subject or skill will be most useful to society in the future. In conclusion,
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 it might seem sensible for
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 to focus only on the most useful
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 or
skills
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, I personally prefer the current system in which
people
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 have the right to study whatever they like.
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task response
Ensure that all the examples and arguments are directly relevant to the topic and support the main points.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas by using transition words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs more effectively.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equipping
  • Financial literacy
  • Well-rounded individual
  • Critical thinking
  • Passion
  • Adult responsibilities
  • Life skills
  • Academic knowledge
  • 21st-century skills
  • Adaptability
  • Diverse curriculum
  • Job market
  • Employment
  • Cultural literacy
  • Empathy
  • Citizenship
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