Nowadays there is an increase in social problem involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children.To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give specific reason and examples to support your answer.

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Involvement of
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guardians
these days is more towards
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than their
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which
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ecalating
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escalating
the social issues related to youngsters. I fully agree
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essay will discuss the reasons for my agreement followed by a brief
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conclusion
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of
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parents
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supervision can spoil the adulthood of the
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is because, if
work
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is elders devote more time to their
work
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,
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neither
they get to know about day to day concerns of their
children
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nor their progress.
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, a healthy parent-child
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does not come into existence.
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,
children
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may seek assistance from other sources or may get into a destructive companion.
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to
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drug addicts and get involved in illegal activities unknowingly.
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, it is extremely difficult for
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to retrieve their
children
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once
children
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are involved in
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acts.
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, many
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compromise
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their career
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of their guardian's attention.
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is because
parents
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are so occupied
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their
work
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that they do not monitor the educational growth of their young ones.
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, the academic performance of
children
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decline
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drastically
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the absence of
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deliberate
supervision of their
parents
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.
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,
children
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do not study unless being scolded by their
parents
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.
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, their future career gets impacted
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poor academic performance. Conclusively, insufficient time spent by
parents
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with their
children
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can drag them into destructive life and can
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spoil their future
career
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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