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The charts show where people get their news and how much they trust these sources.

The charts show where people get their news and how much they trust these sources.
A glance at the two bar charts indicates
that
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the proportion of
what
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kinds of
news
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sources
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people
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 trusted in the present and the percentage of using
news
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sources
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 they believed in the past week in terms of six categories.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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local TV
news
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 was the popular choice for
people
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 who trusted
highly
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 and used
most
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it most
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.
While
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 the individuals thought the online-only
sources
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was
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were
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 not
trustful
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 at the present .
Furthermore
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, the
uasge
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usage
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 of magazines was at the lowest number in the past week. With regards to the first picture, the rate of local tv
news
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 that
people
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 highly trusted was the highest, at over 50%, compared to the least of approximately 25%
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people
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of people
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thought
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who thought
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 the online-only
souces
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sources
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wasn't
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weren't
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 trustful, which was almost
reducing
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 by
a
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half. The figure for six kinds of what
people
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 didn't trust ranged from roughly 9% to exactly 20%.
However
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, turning to the second graph, the rate of using
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news
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sources
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 was peaking at above 80% in
field
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 of local tv
news
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,
then
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 dropped gradually to the bottom of nearly 40% in magazines.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, sources, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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