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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given pie charts compare the ages of
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
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 of two countries in 2000 and give predictions for the future.
Overall
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, it's clearly seen from the chart that the number of
people
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 within 15-59
years
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 in
Yemen
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 will grow in 2050
while
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 the number of
people
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 of the same age group in Italy's
population
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 declines. In 2000
Yemen
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's
population
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 was made up of a significant number of young
people
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. Individuals between the ages of 0-14
years
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 were the majority with a figure slightly higher than 50%. ,
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 in ,
Italy
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,Italy
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people
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 of 0-14
years
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 numbers were three lower than their counterparts in
Yemen
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. By 2050 young of 0-14
years
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 numbers will decline in
Yemen
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 and Italy to 37.0% and 3% respectively.
People
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 between the ages of 15-58
years
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 percentage were almost half of the entire
population
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,
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however
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 there will grow in 2050 to 57.3%. In ,Italy
people
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 of 15-59
years
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 were the majority of their
population
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 at 61.6%, but
this
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 rate will drop by 2050 to 46.2%. Old
people
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 of 60 and above were underpopulated in
Yemen
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 in 2000 but their rate in Italy was quite higher. By 2050 old
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people's
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people
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population
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 in
Yemen
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 will grow just slightly
while
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 their
population
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 increase significantly in Italy.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, yemen, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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