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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can the environment do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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There is a controversial perspective heating debate over the ways of environmental degradation by people.
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 essay is devoted to the underlying roots, followed by some equivalent actions of the state and
individuals
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 to
this
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 serious problem. Without a shadow of a doubt, there
are
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 a wide range of human actions that cause environmental contamination namely water
pollution
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, soil erosion, and especially
air
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pollution
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.
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use
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 of fuel-powered vehicles creates harmful greenhouse gas emissions and climate change to our planet.
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, in Viet Nam, most people
use
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 private
transportation
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such
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 as motorbikes and automobiles which are the main reason for
air
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pollution
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 in
VIet
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Viet
 Nam.
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, an increase in the number of fuel-powered
transportation
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 brings about
deterioration
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the deterioration
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 in
air
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 quality.
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 the measures of damaging the environment by humans are widely acknowledged, the governors and
individuals
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 need to work together to deal with
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 alarming problem. The government can introduce tax incentives to encourage residents to
use
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 bio-friendly vehicles.
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, the Vietnamese state reduces
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the tax
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 for Vinfast electric cars to boost people’s demand.
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, it is necessary for each person to
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 public
transportation
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 that uses renewable energy.
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, in Viet Nam, people can
use
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 eco-friendly public vehicles like Vinbus, high-sky train stations and private
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 that run
by
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 alternative energy
instead
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 of conventional energy sources.
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,
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governors and
individuals
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 should take part in dealing with
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air
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pollution
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. In conclusion,
air
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pollution
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 is a thoughtful problem brought by humans that causes
harmful
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a harmful
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impact
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impacts
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 on the environment. So it is necessary for the government and
individuals
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 to protect the environment together.
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