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Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information, which is available about ways to have a health, balanced diet. What could be the possible causes of this? Suggest some solutions which may improve the eating habits of the young.

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In these modern generations, numerous
people
 are eating very badly regardless of the information. Let me explain the possible effects of the eating habit of unhealthy foods. Nowadays, there are many factors of possible causes of eating unhealthy foods
such
 as advertisements of new goods on social media, what are the new trending foods now to eat, and what are older human beings eating now
then
 suddenly young
people
 are following them because they know it is good to eat and they see it through their own eyes. Considerably, young age is living in our world just to do their own things and following other
people
 for not thinking if it is good to follow. In my opinion, I definitely build a group of young
people
 who are on the good side to follow at other young age, since
this
 may lead to good outcomes when it comes to the execution of the mission of how the other inhabitants become more obedient to perform with the healthy lifestyle for better and longer life.
Moreover
, they do not need to worry about their health and they can share the proper way of a good life.
Furthermore
,
this
 is the most important thing that leads to a symbol of unity for
this
 problem. In my conclusion, in spite of the proliferation of eating hard and not thinking twice when eating, we can manage
this
 problem at the beginning ourselves by giving or proving that it will lead to more serious effects on our bodies.
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