You recently started commuting to work by bicycle and discovered that there is a problem with bicycle parking near the building where you work. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter, •explain the reason for using a bicycle to commute •mention what problems you have encountered with parking •what you recommend to solve the problems
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing regarding the problem I have been seeing for the
last
couple of days. I recently started to travel to work by bicycle but having some issues in the parking area near the Star House Building, which is quite the opposite.
I used to commute by car, but due to
the benefits of running bicycle
, I have been forced to make it a habit by using it as Correct article usage
a bicycle
means
of transportation. Even though, my ongoing disease Correct article usage
a means
such
as high blood pressure is also
in control. Hence
, I start to travel short distances through the cycle.
Moreover
, along with
the benefits, I faced some drawbacks at the parking site. Firstly
, it is really hard for me to find a space
for my cycle because the parking space
is in the common area and other people are also
using it. In addition
, the site is also
dirty with garbage, due to
fixed garbage bins which are located beside the parking space
.
Similarly
, I humbly request you to change the policy from free parking space
to chargeable, which will help to open a few spaces for the workers and shift the scrap boxes to a little far, as a result
, the parking space
will look neat and clean all the time.
I hope you will consider this
and revert me with a positive response.
Yours faithfully,
Harpreet Kaur.Submitted by harpreet291kaur on
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Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance clarity, consider organizing the letter with clear paragraph breaks, especially between the reason for cycling, the problems, and solutions.
Task Achievement
Ensure to maintain a formal tone throughout the letter, avoiding phrases that might sound too colloquial for a formal letter.
Task Achievement
The letter provides clear reasons for using a bicycle, including health motivations.
Task Achievement
You clearly identify problems with the parking space and propose feasible solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal for a letter to a manager.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite