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Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Everyone should be responsible to look after their surroundings to keep the
environment
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 neat and clean. Though, some
people
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 think that the state should encourage local
people
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 to safeguard the
environment
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. Since human activities have a direct impact on nature, I agree that
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 approach is realistic.
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,
People
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 are not aware of how their small activities are affecting nature and becoming the biggest problem these days.
Due to
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 unawareness, certain individuals have generated numerous environmental problems including littering, and dumping poisonous garbage into rivers and lakes.
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, some
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 exploit for commercial purposes, which has drastically bad effects on the quality of the
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.
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, to earn an enormous amount of money, some
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 cut down trees illegally and which leads to deforestation and negative effects on wildlife species.
Due to
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 the significant effects of human activities on the
environment
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 outlined above, I am confident that the state can take necessary steps to encourage
people
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 to be more accountable for their natural surroundings.
The first step is
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 the government should run campaigns often to make
people
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 aware of their precious surroundings and their importance in
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 and the coming time. They should make aware that land and water are equally important as their home to them.
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, the state should implement
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 number of strict rules to punish individuals and organizations that do illegal acts
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 as deforestation, littering and dumping hazardous trash in open spaces.
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, I feel that these steps will make the
people
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 educate, and aware of their responsibility towards the
environment
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. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that many
people
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 think that the influence of each individual is minimal and negligible, I believe with proper government help, more
people
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 will become
environment
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 conscious. Gradually, the condition will be improved and individuals will become more nature friendly.
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