The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.
The diagram illustrates the steps required for the manufacturing of
chocolate
production.
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Overall
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this
process is composed of ten key steps, beginning with growing the Linking Words
cocoa
trees in the right locations and culminating in pressing the Use synonyms
cocoa
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beans
in order to liquidize them and produce Use synonyms
chocolate
.
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Firstly
, Linking Words
cocoa
plants are planted in favourable nations, namely South America, Africa, and Indonesia. Use synonyms
Then
, when the Linking Words
cocoa
pods have matured and turned red, Use synonyms
the next step is
harvesting them by cutting them open and emptying out the white Linking Words
cocoa
nuts inside. Use synonyms
Thirdly
, the seeds are fermented by being sandwiched between leaves, before being spread out in order to be dried under the sun. After adequately drying, the Linking Words
cocoa
seeds are put in large bags before being transported by either trains or lorry to a factory.
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Next,
at the factory, the Linking Words
beans
are roasted at 350 degrees Celsius. The roasted Use synonyms
beans
afterwards go through a machine where the outer shell is separated and dumped, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
beans
are crushed. Use synonyms
Finally
, Linking Words
this
inner part of the nuts is pressed by a machine, turning it into liquid Linking Words
chocolate
ready to be used in various Use synonyms
chocolate
products.Use synonyms
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