Some people believe that social media sites, asch as Facebook or Twitter, have negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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there is a huge discussion about the relationship between social media and the ability of young people to form personal relationships. Someone believes influences in a negative way, others

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. A lot of people had some social problems linked to the overuse of

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social network like Facebook, Instagram or Twitter, and especially the

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one has created a specific social phenomenon called echo chamber.

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the enforcement of a wrong belief

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the constant expositions to it, is a phenomenon which is polluting our public discussion paving the way to

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increasing

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misinformation and social conflicts.

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the social network and

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are improving their capability in public speech and their culture increasing their possibility to have a good conversation. Another increasing phenomenon is the

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when the aim of your days is escaping from your

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imprisoned in your own room. Especially in Japan,

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the Country and for the government of Tokyo, that

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the duty to get better

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drastic situation. In conclusion, the issue is only about the way using

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and social networks: you have to moderate your use of the new technology, it’s a duty

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. No one could live in a dystopian scenario where social

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, we must live our reality,

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if it is empty.