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What is your favorite activity? Why do you like this activity? The last time that you did this activity?

#activity #time
My
favorite
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 activity is walking outside
especially
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of
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 natural places or
the
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 beach. In
this
 essay, I will
discuses
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 my
favorite
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, why I do it and the best time I do
this
 activity.
In
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 the one hand, walking outside is
perfect
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 habit for everyone. So, l like it very much.
Firstly
,
waling
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walking
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 is one of
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the sport
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sport
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. It best time I
doing
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 in the morning before eating any things around twenty minutes. There are many benefits
for
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 example, burring much
of
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fat and feeling activity a long day. Exemplify, in some country walking in the morning is a rule, must
every one
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 do it. The other time is in
evening
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the evening
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of
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on
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 the beach ; I
breath
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 fresh air after
finish
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finishing
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 my work so the result
improve
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improves
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mood
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my mood
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.
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, walking outside means that I will get enough sunlight. Sunshine acts as a source of vitamin D.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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