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In the world, the pollution level in large cities is being worse. What are the causes and solutions?

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These days minors spend much
time
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 on computer
games
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 and
television
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,
nevertheless
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, most people consider that these types of amusement damage offspring's psychology.
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,
while
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 I believe that
such
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games
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 and
television
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programs
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 are pastimes, I completely agree that
TV
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 and electronic
games
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 are bad for
children
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's intellectual. In the first place, I consider that pc
games
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 impact
children
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's brains
thus
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 some
games
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 teach fight our
children
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 and
also
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 these types of
games
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 affect
children
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's emotional and daily lives. I think that
children
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 who play console
games
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 have several problems
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 these problems make lives difficult for
children
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.
In particular
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, if we take two
children
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 one of them plays
games
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 usually, we will observe the child who plays
games
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 have some intellectual problems
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 these are insomnia, anorexia and forgetfulness all in all, I think that computer
games
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 are not suitable for
children
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's mental health.
On the other hand
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, it seems to me that most
TV
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programs
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 are not proper for
children
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 in view of the fact that these
programs
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 harm offspring's state of mind,
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,
therefore
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 a lot of parents are against
children
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 watching
television
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 because they think
that is
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 just a waste of
time
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. We know that
children
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 are learning more information on
TV
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therefore
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 some shows or
programs
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 affect
children
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's brains.
In particular
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, watching too many
television
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 shows cause hiccups, anxiety and fear
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 I think that
children
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 do not spend too much
time
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 watching
TV
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 shows. 31 In conclusion, it strikes me that
children
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 should not spend much more
time
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 on pc
games
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 and
television
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hence
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 these entertainments slash
children
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's brains. Personally, I think that most
TV
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 shows and computer
games
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 cause many psychological issues which is why the way of think, they do not work much with
TV
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 and
also
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 electronic
games
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.
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