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A friend has invited you to a party, but you are busy on the day it's being held. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Apologise for not being able to attend. • Explain why you're busy. • Invite your friend to do something else with you. Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter with: Dear ...

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Dear Alex, I hope you are doing well. I am really sorry that I won’t be able to come to your party. I was looking forward to it, but something important has come up. I am busy that day because I have to attend a family event.
Firstly
, my cousin is getting married in France, and the wedding is on the same day as your party. I have to be there with my family, so I cannot make it to your party. I hope you understand.
Secondly
, we are going by car
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 France, so we have to start a week before the wedding,
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because
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because
 the journey is 3 days
However
, I would still love to spend time with you. Maybe we can do something together another day. How about we go out for lunch, there is a new restaurant with French cuisine, the one you like or watch a movie, I heard that a new movie came out
this
 week and it is interesting. We can do
this
 next weekend. I would really enjoy catching up with you
then
. Best wishes, Andrei
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task achievement
Consider making your explanation clearer and more concise. This would strengthen your argument and improve the readability of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Make sure you stay consistent with the use of tenses. For instance, 'maybe we can do something together another day' could be improved to 'maybe we could do something together another day.'
suitable writing tone
You have a polite and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is very suitable for the context.
greeting and closing
You have structured the letter well with an appropriate greeting and closing, keeping it clear and easy to follow.
complete response
You clearly addressed all aspects of the task: apologizing for not attending, explaining why, and suggesting an alternative plan.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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