If a product is good and meets customer needs, then people will buy it and advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable fact that in
this
modern era , an increasing number of more and more humans believe that
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, if products are good and come across constumer needs , after that individuals,
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constumer
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customer
needs
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that individuals
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will buy
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and advertising is unnecessary . Many individuals hold different beliefs about it. Personally l definitely with the above-expressed statement and there are many compelling reasons to support my view. In
this
following essay , l intend two reasons for
this
. First and foremost, the main cause is most
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consumers tend to buy quality goods and satisfying
things
for several purposes .
For
this
reason
, a lot of companies think it is not
neccesary
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necessary
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for advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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to
show
their
brend
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brand
. These days many people want to purchase
this
kind of
things
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thing
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even without
adds
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ads
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.
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is the
reason
, it is not important to sell
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the commodity
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to
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publics
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by
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adds
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ads
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.
For instance
, in my
country
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people purchase some
kind
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of
things
without
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advertisements
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.
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is the
reason
, they
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not enough time to watch
adds
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ads
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.
On the other hand
, moving it should be noted that everything has its merits and demerits.
For
this
reason
, it has some drawbacks. From my point of view,
this
way
is a bit harmful
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merchants .
This
is the
reason
, the best
way
to
show
products whole over the world with
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advertisements
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.
In addition
,
this
method
to help
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show
comaniesʼ
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companies
goods for other countries .
For instance
, some
bussinesmans
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businessman
choose
this
way
to buy
things
for their office . By
way
of my conclusion, l once again reaffirm my position that
the
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to
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help us to
show
products whole over the world.
For
this
reason
, it is very easy to sell commodities .
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