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It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
These days,
people
 prefer to take
risks
 in all of their life choices and business decisions .it has some positive and negative effects on their life.the weight of Advantages or disadvantages acious to the situation so we can not provide a certain percentage. On one hand,
people
 want to take
risks
 in their life and business because they want to improve their situation so they
search
 about sides of their subject
while
 they reach good
results
 take a
risk
.it has some benefits,
Firstly
,
people
 who want to take the
risk
 know that it may have a negative effect so they improve their acceptance force.
Secondly
, when
people
 take a
risk
 and it has positive
results
 they earn self-reliance
for example
 when the manager takes a
risk
 and earns profit , the manager earns a good feeling ahead of the employees.
Finally
,
risk
 can help
people
 they should accept their
results
 and it means they have responsibility.
On the other hand
, many
people
 are encouraged to do risky business but they don’t
any
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 knowledge about it and they don’t
search
 about the situation so the percentage of failure comes up and maybe it causes bankruptcy.
While
people
 should
search
 about their
risks
 than do it. Because sometimes the
results
 of
risk
 are incorrigible. In conclusion,
people
 like to take
risks
 in all of their life’s subjects. it has some benefits and bad effects in different situations so we can’t distinguish the weight of good or bad effects.if
people
 before deciding to
search
 about situations the probability of success is going up.
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  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
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