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The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, a place for hiring, over the period of three years.

The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, a place for hiring, over the period of three years.
This
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 table represents information about the profits and spending of Brooklyn Hall in three different years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are 4 different categories of services in a hall that contribute to spending.
According to
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 the data, the hire of rooms was the most expensive tool, in the first year it was 32000 pounds
then
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 it rose to 34,000 but it was followed by a slight decline in the next year,
whereas
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 the cafe was the least expensive entertainment on the first term it was 3000 pounds after that it increased by 1000 and
lastly
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 it doubled its original price.
Secondly
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although
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 funding for the council tower was stable throughout the first two periods at 20.000 it witnessed a decrease to 15.000
at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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 funding of the bodies started at 22.000
then
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 it followed a marginal dip by 2.000 and was constant for another two terms.
Finally
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,
while
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 total income experienced an upward trend so did expenditures and profit was suffering

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