The gap between the rich and the poor is widening very fast. What are the causes and effects of this widening gap? You may give solutions based on your knowledge and experience.

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There is a tendency to divide the world into two categories, the rich and the poor, and

this

imbalance has been widening quickly. In my opinion, some problems in current

tax

systems

and

education

curriculums have worsened the situation and these policies should be reconsidered.

Firstly

, it is obvious that

while

the rich grow their wealth,

the

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poverty worsens. One main reason for

this

phenomenon is the current

tax

systems

where business owners have advantages. Income

tax

is what employees need to pay,

whereas

investment

tax

is what employers need to pay.

Income

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tax

rate is usually higher than

investment

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the investment

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tax

and

this

system encourages employers to be wealthier.

For example

, Warren Buffett, who is a billionaire and an American business investor, pays less

tax

than his secretary.

Secondly

education

is essential to achieve a successful career and everyone should have a right to acquire knowledge at school equally.

However

, the rich tend to go to private schools, where more advanced curriculums and

latest

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facilities are provided,

while

the poor have no choice but to go to public schools or work.

This

circumstance leads to an increase in differences among students.

For instance

, high school is not mandatory in Japan and some students cannot afford to

enroll

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and end up suffering from poor job opportunities. To solve these negative outcomes,

tax

systems

should be rethought and

education

should be offered regardless of social status. If more taxes were required to be paid by the rich, the government could allocate

those extra money

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into healthcare and

education

, which the poor need. In conclusion,

tax

and

education

systems

increase the differences between the rich and the poor, but I believe some revised government policies can help shorten the status gap.

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The gap between the rich and the poor is widening very fast. What are the causes and effects of this widening gap? You may give solutions based on your knowledge and experience.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

being slim is associated with fashion. do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

In some places old age is valued, while in ohter cultures yoouth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

You have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that was booked by the organiser of a company meeting. Write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include Details about the meeting The problem you face What should be done

It is sometimes said that countries should produce all the food for their populations to eat and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.