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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional food and traditional ways of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#convenience #foods #food #preparation
Fast and easy
food
 will be widespread
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all over the world within the next few years and conventional
food
 and method will be displaced.I totally agreed with
this
due to
 busy lifestyles and lack of knowledge of recipes, Ingredients and unavailability of types of equipment will be major challenges will be the carry on
this
 traditional
food
 and their preparation method.
Firstly
 ,
due to
 busy lifestyles,most people can not spend hours in the kitchen and limited
time
 availability they are thinking of the easiest way to prepare their meals,
moreover
, the younger generation is very lazy to spend some
time
 in the kitchen and they love to have their meals in fancy restaurants.
for example
 in Asian countries traditional meal usually has main course and variety of curries and it will take more than 6 hours to prepare it and in modern ,society no one can spend that much
time
 only for a one meal
on the other hand
, making traditional
food
require
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 recipe knowledge and which is most people do not have nowadays,
also
, another challenge is current modern equipment cannot be used to prepare conventional
food
 and a wide variety of ingredients required to make that meals.even though processed foodstuff is not a healthy option but it will save a lot of
time
 and energy.
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 instance survey conducted by a famous magazine shows 90% of kids are not eating healthy
food
 and they
addicted
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 to processed
snack
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. In conclusion.convenience
meal
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meals
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 will be more popular and traditional cuisine and its preparation method will disappear within the next decade.
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