The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The bar chart provides data on the
stock
rate of Facebook,
Apple
, Google and
Yahoo
from 2011 to 2016.
It is clear that
Facebook and
Yahoo
had the highest
stock
prices in the year 2011 (approximately 7500).
Then
these two companies had critically different development:
while
the first company's
shares
grew steadily during the whole
period
and accounted for 20000 in 2016,
Yahoo
stocks shew a downward trend and the price was only about 2500
at the end
of the
period
. Probing
further
,
Apple
's
shares
costed
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5000 in 2011 and
then
surged significantly and reached a peak in 2012, of almost 35000. The
stock
price of
Apple
dipped in 2013 and fluctuated up to the end of the
period
. The
last
figure made up only approximately 5000. It is remarkable, that the
shares
of Google remained stable during the
period
and accounted for about 1000.
Overall
, the Facebook
stock
price shew an upward trend,
Apple
shares
fluctuated a lot,
Yahoo
stocks almost halved and Google
shares
were stable.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, apple, yahoo, shares, period with synonyms.
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