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The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.

The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016.
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The bar chart provides data on the
stock
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 rate of Facebook,
Apple
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, Google and
Yahoo
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 from 2011 to 2016.
It is clear that
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 Facebook and
Yahoo
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 had the highest
stock
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 prices in the year 2011 (approximately 7500).
Then
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 these two companies had critically different development:
while
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 the first company's
shares
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 grew steadily during the whole
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 and accounted for 20000 in 2016,
Yahoo
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 stocks shew a downward trend and the price was only about 2500
at the end
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 of the
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. Probing
further
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,
Apple
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's
shares
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costed
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 5000 in 2011 and
then
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 surged significantly and reached a peak in 2012, of almost 35000. The
stock
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 price of
Apple
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 dipped in 2013 and fluctuated up to the end of the
period
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. The
last
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 figure made up only approximately 5000. It is remarkable, that the
shares
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 of Google remained stable during the
period
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 and accounted for about 1000.
Overall
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, the Facebook
stock
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 price shew an upward trend,
Apple
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shares
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 fluctuated a lot,
Yahoo
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 stocks almost halved and Google
shares
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 were stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words stock, apple, yahoo, shares, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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