TOPIC: More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?

In developing nations, there has been a huge increase in the
number
of private vehicles sold to first-time buyers. The principal
problems
this
causes are pollution and traffic congestion, and the most viable solution is to impose higher taxes on
cars
. The primary issue developing countries face when their citizens start to buy
cars
is increased pollution.
This
occurs
as a result
of exhaust
fume
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fumes
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from a tremendous
number
of
cars
which still run on fossil fuels
while
electric
cars
are still in the pipeline. The greater
number
of vehicles on the road is
also
responsible for a rise in traffic jams.
This
is because the infrastructure in developing countries is not fully developed in keeping with the dramatic increases in
cars
on the street.
For example
, citizens in Vietnam can hardly move an inch during rush hour when the narrow streets are clogged with hundreds of
cars
and motorcycles. A solution to these
problems
is to make first-time purchasers pay extra money for their
cars
.
This
would solve the
problems
by making the purchase of a car the low priority for most people as they would be hindered by the quite prohibitive price of
cars
.
As a result
, they would turn to other modes of public transportation
such
as trains or buses, leading to a dramatic decrease in the
number
of automobiles on the street.
For example
, the price of a car in Vietnam is nearly double that in other countries
due to
heavy taxes, making the possession of a car in Vietnam a luxury to most people. In conclusion, the increasing
number
of
cars
sold to first-time buyers leads to air pollution and traffic jams, but these
problems
could be effectively tackled by adding more duty to
cars
.
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