TOPIC: More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think is a possible solution?
In developing nations, there has been a huge increase in the
number
of private vehicles sold to first-time buyers. The principal problems
this
causes are pollution and traffic congestion, and the most viable solution is to impose higher taxes on cars
.
The primary issue developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars
is increased pollution. This
occurs as a result
of exhaust fume
from a tremendous Fix the agreement mistake
fumes
number
of cars
which still run on fossil fuels while
electric cars
are still in the pipeline. The greater number
of vehicles on the road is also
responsible for a rise in traffic jams. This
is because the infrastructure in developing countries is not fully developed in keeping with the dramatic increases in cars
on the street. For example
, citizens in Vietnam can hardly move an inch during rush hour when the narrow streets are clogged with hundreds of cars
and motorcycles.
A solution to these problems
is to make first-time purchasers pay extra money for their cars
. This
would solve the problems
by making the purchase of a car the low priority for most people as they would be hindered by the quite prohibitive price of cars
. As a result
, they would turn to other modes of public transportation such
as trains or buses, leading to a dramatic decrease in the number
of automobiles on the street. For example
, the price of a car in Vietnam is nearly double that in other countries due to
heavy taxes, making the possession of a car in Vietnam a luxury to most people.
In conclusion, the increasing number
of cars
sold to first-time buyers leads to air pollution and traffic jams, but these problems
could be effectively tackled by adding more duty to cars
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