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The maps below slow the changes that have taken place in the resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

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The two maps illustrate the transformation of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. In general,
a
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plenty of
building
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buildings
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 were constructed and replaced
original
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 abundant
plants
 surrounding
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this
 place. Looking at the change in more detail,
initially
 the area of more
plants
 which
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 of
northeast
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 in 1990.
However
, the
plants
 were demolished
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 replaced by new housings and
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an airport
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airport
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 in 2005.
Next,
the most noticeable change was the
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area which fulled of trees
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 cut down and turned
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 a factory.
Furthermore
, the new line of railway
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 from
original
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 starting northeast to
southwest
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 which surrounded half place in 2005. Moving to the
location
 of
west
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, the areas developed from three to four regions. Especially, in 2005, there were a supermarket and condos in the
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 of
southeast
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 to replace the hosings and
plants
 in 1990.
Furthermore
, the
location
 of
middle
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were
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fulled
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 of
plants
then
 those were removed and developed
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 residential area. Compare to the two periods of Templeton, the whole place developed urbanization
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