The diagram below shows the process of making soft cheese.
The diagram illustrates the steps required for the manufacturing of soft cheese from several elements.
Overall
, this
process is composed of 5 key stages, commencing with mixing ingredients and culminating in the finished products that are ready to be used.
The first involves mixing two main components namely water and milk together. After that, the mixture is cooled for 2 hours
at a temperature of 5 degrees Celsius. Then
, a favourable amount of salt is added to the composite before it undergoes the constant fermentation process which lasts for 6 hours
.
The next stage requires the liquid to evaporate, which let off its steam through a channel. After 8 hours
of being under the heat of 100 degrees Celcius, the mixture becomes thicker. Finally
, this
mixture is stored in a cooling space, after waiting for 6 hours
at a temperature of 5 degrees Celsius, where wastewater and the finished soft cheese are filtered.Submitted by dangtranquoctrung01 on
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