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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the information regarding the size of the community aged 65 and over in three different
countries
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 namely, the
USA
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,
Sweden
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 and
Japan
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 from 1940 to 2040.The data is calibrated in percentage.
Overall
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, the
USA
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 had a maximum
population
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 as compared to the other two
countries
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such
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 as
Sweden
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 and
Japan
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whereas
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Japan
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 had a minimum
population
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 in the year 1940. At a fleeting glance,in 1940
Sweden
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 showed an upward trend up to 1960 which was nearly 9%.In 1980, the culture increased to approximately 14%
whereas
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 the
USA
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 had a slightly more
population
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 aged 65 and over.In 2000,
Sweden
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 illustrates a decline in populace which was around 13%.
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, in 2020 public accelerated by 20% as compared to the number of people in the other two
countries
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 which were 14% in the
USA
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 and 9% in
Japan
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 respectively.
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,
Japan
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's community went down rapidly in the year 1960 which was almost 3%.The
population
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 remained constant between 1960 to 1980 .Interestingly,it shows a gradual rise in the number of people in 2000 which was approximately 5% and
this
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 percentage was less whilst for the other two
countries
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.In 2040,all three
countries
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 projected a tremendous jump in the
population
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 .
Japan
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 estimated more populace in the country nearly 28%
whereas
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Sweden
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 and
USA
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 predicted less society.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, usa, sweden, japan, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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