The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
The given bar chart gives data about the different modes of transport used to travel and from work in
one
European
city in 1960,1980 and 2000.There are four different modes of
transports
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transport
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.
they
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are
bus
,
car
,
bike
and foot. Looking at the graph as a whole,in 1960 the
bigest
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proportion
of used
food
and the lowest
proportion
of used
car
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cars
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.In 1980 the
higest
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highest
proportion
of used
bus
the lowest
proportion
of used
food
.In 2000 the
higest
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highest
proportion
of used
car
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cars
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the
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lowest
proportion
of used
food
. In detail, about 17% of people in
one
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European
used
bus
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a bus
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,just over 5% used
car
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a car
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,25% used
bike
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a bike
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,
almost
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and almost
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number 35% used
food
.In 1980,slightly about 25% used
bus
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buses
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,approximately 23% used
car
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cars
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,20% used
bike
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bikes
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,
nearly
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number 35% used
food
.In 2000,just over 15% used
bus
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a bus
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,slightly about 35% used
car
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a car
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,
rougly
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roughly
6% used
bike
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a bike
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,
around
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and around
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9% used
food
.About 35% of people in
one
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apply
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European
used
car
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a car
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is the
higest
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highest
proportion
than
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in all
category
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categories
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Also
,around 5% of people in
one
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European
used
car
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a car
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is the lowest
proportion
than
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apply
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category
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categories
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words one, european, bus, car, bike, proportion, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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