Some people think that watching movies is a waste of time. Others believe it is a useful way to relax and learn. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that watching
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is optional for some people.
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it is a commonly held belief that watching
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is a waste of
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, there is
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an argument that others think it is a useful way to learn and relax. In
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essay, I will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On the one hand, spending
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watching films is like throwing your gold hours and minutes in the garbage.
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, must invest your
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to build yourself for the future and explore new skills or hobbies.
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,
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of staying and wasting money at the cinema, research something useful for you
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as going to the gym to build your body or visiting new cities.
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, watching
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have many advantages.
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, is the best
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to date your friends and spend the
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relaxing and not focusing on what you are watching.
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, watching different serial
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is the best way to teach children new things
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learning new languages because the interactive material behind the screen attracts kids to learn information easily. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that spending free
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watching
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is the one method from various methods to relaxing and cutting your mind from overthinking, and maybe
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this
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happy
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will push yourself to more focus on your job or make creative ideas in your life.

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Try to make your main points clearer and provide more details to support them.
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Add more examples to show both sides of the argument better.
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Ensure your conclusion clearly reflects your opinion with strong reasons.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You successfully present both sides of the argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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