Nowadays in many countries, people are following the latest fashion, hairstyles and so on. Is it a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays in many
countries
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people
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are following the
fashion
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hairstyles or
clothes
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fashion
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because they do not like the oldest
fashion
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hairstyles or
clothes
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fashion
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.
This
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about
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fashion
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the majority
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people
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want to go with
fashion
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and they really
love
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follow
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following
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fashion
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and they usually get a haircut in
fashion
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and
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very
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good for
him
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as they
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therefore
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like
follow
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news about
fashion
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. Now many
people
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dress up in
fashion
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for
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example, they wear sneakers with sportswear and
classicwear
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classic wear
with shoes
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So dress up almost all
people
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in the world. It was positive
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.
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,
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fashion
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fashionable
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clothes
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not
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are not
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nice to wear and
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this
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fashionable
clothes
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look unusual for other
people
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who do not know about
fashion
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is very difficult
explain
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to
people
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. They can think about you
bad
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badly
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. They think
in
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the world has many different
clothes
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for
dresses
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dressing
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up. Many teenagers get a haircut in
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fashion
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a fashion
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their parents will not allow it.
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, teenagers will trim
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hair on the sides. It was negative
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and
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essay believes that
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is a negative trend for
people
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. In conclusion
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my opinion,
people
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must dress up in
fashion
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but they should not exaggerate
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action. I listed above has a positive
side
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and
negative
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a negative
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side
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.
People
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must follow
fashion
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and negative
side
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they should not exaggerate
this
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action
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