The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

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The photograph illustrates the way of using geothermal heat to create

electricity

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five stages.

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the most complicated part is changing steam into

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though

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generator

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and turbine.

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,there are two steps

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completed

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underground in order to use hot rocks

deeply

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beneath the ground. The first stage is pumping cold

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down to 4.5 km deep underground.

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,they put the cold

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through

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the geothermal

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zone which

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of extremely hot rocks.

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this

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way,the cold

water

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will absorb heat from

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the geothermal

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zone.Next,after the cold

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had

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hot enough,the pump

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hot

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up.The fourth step is making steam

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with

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a condenser. At the

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stage of

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the geothermal

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power plant,there is a machine called

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is powered by steam.And it will roll at a high speed.

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,the turbine

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generator

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to produce

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.In the

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stage,it needed two different machines.After all five stages,the

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will be sent to the electrical tower.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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4 paragraphs

152 words

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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The percentage of overweight children in westrn society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.

To what extent do you agree that the men and women should do the same job as each other.