The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
The photograph illustrates the way of using geothermal heat to create
electricity
by
five stages.
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in
It is clear that
the most complicated part is changing steam into electricity
though
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through
generator
and turbine.Correct article usage
a generator
Besides
,there are two steps should
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that should
completed
underground in order to use hot rocks Change the verb form
complete
be completed
deeply
beneath the ground.
The first stage is pumping cold Replace the word
deep
water
down to 4.5 km deep underground.Then
,they put the cold water
through geothermal
zone which Add an article
the geothermal
consist
of extremely hot rocks.Change the verb form
consists
By
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In
this
way,the cold water
will absorb heat from geothermal
zone.Next,after the cold Add an article
the geothermal
a geothermal
water
had became
hot enough,the pump Change the verb form
become
the
hot Correct article usage
apply
water
up.The fourth step is making steam by
a condenser.
At the Change preposition
with
last
stage of geothermal
power plant,there is a machine called Add an article
the geothermal
a geothermal
turbine
is powered by steam.And it will roll at a high speed.Correct article usage
a turbine
Additionally
,the turbine motivate
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motivates
generator
to produce Correct article usage
the generator
electricity
.In the last
stage,it needed two different machines.After all five stages,the electricity
will be sent to the electrical tower.Submitted by yuetongli98 on
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