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At universities in some countries, it is common for students, especially for those who have no scholarship, to have jobs while they study. They may work in offices, at the library, in labs or as teachers’ assistants. They earn money for living expenses and sometimes receive a reduction in tuition as well. Is this a good idea? Support your opinion with specific reasons and details

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In recent times, increase the number of
students
 doing part-time jobs. Most of the university
students
, who are not able to get scholarships or reductions in tuition costs,
students
 do work
along with
 the educational programs. It helps them to
face
 the living expense and pay some fees for their studies. In my opinion, it is a positive development.
To begin
 with, most of the
students
 are doing part-time jobs
along with
 their studies. The main reason for doing
this
 is to
face
 their living expense. To put on another way, most college
students
 are studying long distances from their homes,which is led them to live in a hostel or rented rooms. So they should find some money to pay the hostel fee or rent of a room.
Additionally
, it helps
students
 to gain experience and information for their future.
This
 means it helps
students
 to improve their communication skills. Because they see different types of people and
face
 various problems in their workplace, they can adapt
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 for the future
Furthermore
,
students
 do jobs
along with
 their studies helpful for their parents because they can pay some tuition fees through their earnings
For example
, in India 65% of
students
 are from
a
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poor family or middle-class families,
therefore
students
 do the part-time job are very helpful for their parents In conclusion, in my opinion, doing a part-time job is useful for
students
 to
face
 living expenses and helpful for their parents through paying some amount in their tuition fees,
therefore
 it is a positive idea.
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